Welcome and thank you for being part of Warrior English for National Poetry Month.
We are in Week Three, so make sure you stop by Week One for instructions and to make your first poetry post if you haven't already.
Remember the instructions! If you've forgotten, go back to Week One and read them again.
Sister Jackson's Poem:
The world spins at the same rate
For everyone out of the gate.
The same hours and minutes,
For each day--something we can trust.
Why can't the warmth continue
Why can't the smiles light anew
How the days do linger as they fly.
We all are stronger when we work together, we are blessed with mothers and fathers. We make our own choices here and there, and sometimes life isn't always fair, but we strive to do our best for the Lord, and he blesses us with a great reward. Christ atoned for all of our sins every last bit, he never said it would be easy he only said it would be worth it.
ReplyDeleteThat was amazing. The message that I got from that was so deep and meaningful. Great job writing. Keep it up!
DeleteUgh! That is so good! I loved it so much! That was so truthful and poetic. Good job!
DeleteGood things to think about. Where would we all be without mothers, fathers, and Christ.
DeleteAliya, your writing is excellent, but it is a paragraph in this format. Break it into lines and stanzas to create the poem form.
DeleteAwesome poem. Truly kept me reading.
DeleteBeautiful and well written! I love your message.
DeleteMy friend saw this and loved it!
DeleteSpencer Evans (TX)
ReplyDeleteDiary of Anne Frank blackout poem:
Danger comes, but we must accept,
not grumble, and trust in God to
raise us up if we bear this suffering.
I like that you mentioned bearing suffering, and the reward we get for doing so. Great Blackout poem!
DeleteThat was really good. Even though it was short and simple, it has a powerful message. Good work!
DeleteOh my gosh that's so tender! Totally Lionel it.
DeleteI like how it all fit together. It reminds me not to grumble over simple things when they had it so hard.
DeleteGood beginning and middle, but needs a better end. Otherwise it looks good.
DeleteThis is really good! You found very descriptive words and fit them together just right. Such a powerful message.
DeleteWow, hard to believe this is a black out. The message is so clear and powerful. Love it! Keep them coming!
DeleteThis is blackout...? Its so beautiful and empowering.
DeleteMy Italian Sonnet Poem: (Hopefully I didn't butcher it!)
ReplyDeleteThe rain falls here,
the rain falls there,
the rain falls everywhere!
That rain isn't a tear,
that it shall fall here,
for a wonderful moment,
during a storm full of torment,
The rain shall fall near.
The rain has now stopped,
how sad for me,
The rain must start again.
The rain must be mopped!
too slippery for thee!
It shall rain every now and then.
That was great. The way that you described the rain was really awesome. I love the rain (depending on my mood). Great work!
DeleteRain is such a wonderful thing. You did a great job! Keep it up! :)
DeleteI love how you rhymed everything. It shows how the rain can affect our mood. Good job.
DeleteWonderful sonnet! Be sure to capitalize all the first letters of the lines; that's part of what makes poetry work.
DeleteIs rain falling?
DeleteBeautiful! I love the feeling your sonnet conveys.
DeleteExcellent! I loved the rhythm!
DeleteAriel Bilyeu (D.E.)
4th Period (DE)
ReplyDeleteFahrenheit 451 Black-Out Poem
The beautiful fireflies
Appear beyond the dawn,
And smile at the world.
The immense darkness breaking.
Wow, that's beautiful! Which page is this from???
DeleteI have no idea. It's the black-out poem we did in Senior English on Monday
DeleteThat was really great. It reminded me of Christ and the Second Coming. Awesome work!
DeleteFireflies are my childhood! In New York there were fireflies every summer night. It was so fun to catch them! Oh, the memories.
DeleteSimply wonderful.
DeleteMaKenna Moses
DeleteDE, 4th Period
I really liked the way this flowed as I read it! You picked words that really build on each other. I thought that it gave a message of hope. You start with just the light of fireflies and end with the darkness breaking. Well done!!
I think this describes the ending of F451. The ending of sadness and just a ray of hope. I love it, good job!
DeleteThis poem flows really well! Great job.
DeleteIts crazy how everyone gets such different results with blackout poetry. I have to say this is my favorite so far. (mostly because of the fireflies) :)
DeleteNat Rudd (1st Period)
ReplyDeleteDiary of Anne Frank Black-out Poem
None protected us
And still we remained undiscovered.
Invasion comes.
Bombs, then Fear.
No one is coming to make us stronger.
We are in chains,
Chained with a thousand feelings.
Power is terrible.
We suffer so terribly,
Suffering instead of good.
Wow!!! Nat this is spectacular. That blackout poem is so well one!
DeleteVery nice!! Good job on choosing those words! It ended up beautiful!
DeleteNicely done! This is amazing! I didn't even notice it was a blackout poem at first because it just flows so nicely. Really amazing.
DeleteChris Cox DE P4.
DeleteNice blackout poem. I loved your word choice, and how you described your story.
Sister Jackson, I really liked your poem. It was very meaningful :)
ReplyDeleteI appreciate you giving me feedback, Nat! I'm glad you enjoyed it.
DeleteHow Do I
ReplyDeleteHow do I see thee?
In the sun shine each day
In the grass in the trees that I play
How do I see thee?
How do I love thee?
In quiet pondering peace
Or when our laughter did not cease How do I love thee?
How can we be together forever?
How may I treat you in the best way? How can I love the even more?
In the Celestial glory never to sever
By kindly being by my side each and every day
By following Him our love will soar!
That was amazing. The message was so strong. Great work!
DeleteWow Caleigh that was so beautiful. Now I'm asking the same question 'How do I love thee?' That was super good. Great job!
DeleteOh my goodness Caleigh I love this!! You are such a fantastic writer! Thank you for sharing with talent with us. I love all of the words that you chose and the picture you painted in my head.
DeleteThis was really good! I really like it. It's a new perspective in "How do I see?" Great job!!
DeleteI really liked this Caleigh! It is really so true and powerful. I liked how at the end you asked three questions at once then gave the answers, it gave it a really cool effect.
DeleteCan you guess who I am talking about?
ReplyDeleteHow do I love you? Let me tell the ways,
I love you more than Summer breezes that purge the air of heat.
I love you more than the songs of birds that make my ears feel sweet,
Your company means more to me than a million Broadway plays.
Without you near I feel the fear of future times and days,
The presence that you bring with you is far from a mere treat.
Your love for me shines brightly so that darkness can’t compete,
I try to stay worthy so that your spirit with me stays.
When I am down your comfort lifts me up,
And when I serve your praise is my reward,
When you are gone I’m lost and feeling shattered,
My memories with you are filling in my cup,
Your tender hugs are priceless, more than I could afford,
In my worst hours you care for me, a heart that’s torn and tattered.
That was amazing! You did very well writing that. Keep up the good work :)
DeleteYour poems are always so good!! Very nice description!! Love it.
Delete"A million Broadway plays." Yes! You always write great poetry! Great job!
DeleteSadie Larsen 1st period, DAF Blackout poem.
ReplyDeleteNight light undiscovered,
invasion and bombs,
we must be strong,
God will raise us up.
This poem is about Anne's life she couldn't see the night sky and everyone in the secret annex is waiting for invasion to come but she knows that after the war God will strengthen them and she knows its just a test in life.
That was really great. The message in that is so true. Great job!
DeleteVery nice! I agree with Nat, this is a very good message.
DeleteGod will always raise us up is a great message and portrayed nicely in this poem.
DeleteHow do I love thee? Let me count the ways.
ReplyDeleteI love thee when I'm sad.
I love thee when I'm glad.
So many emotions, I could only paraphrase.
You're always here for me throughout all our days.
I hope you know I love thee, mom and dad.
Even in the moments when I appear very mad.
You bring satisfaction overpowering my malaise.
I love thee to the moon.
I love thee to the sun.
The brightness of it all fills me with affection.
Please don't leave too soon
Or I may have to run
Back home to feel your protection.
Wow!!! That was amazing! I loved it so much! It was so well done! great job!
DeleteBrennan I love this! I love my parents too. Great job writing!!
DeleteThis is great!! Very nice word choice!
DeleteVery well written, shows that we have to love people at all times.
DeleteYou did a really good job! that shows that parents do make up the difference in our lives.
DeleteMiss you – By Trevor Christensen
ReplyDeleteIf only I could hear your voice
If I even had the choice
I’d wish upon a shooting star
Though it wouldn’t get me far
Bidding you to come back
A piece of heart I lack
I miss you so much
It’s all for such
Memories we had…
The good and the bad
I wish we had more…
Times I adore
You left us early
For surely
I still have pain
But I’ll see you again
This is dedicated to my Brother Hunter, that passed away when he was 13.
It's a beautiful tribute, Trevor.
DeleteThis is a beautiful poem, and the fact that it is a tribute makes it even stronger.
DeleteThat was awesome of how you do that! I am sure your brother is very grateful for that. I agree with Sage the tribute does make it stronger.
DeleteThat poem was really well done and the meaning was very deep.
DeleteFantastic Poem bro! I bet Hunter loves this! I know I do, :) Keep up the great work!
DeleteIts a very nice poem, losing someone is very hard, I lost one of my brothers a couple years ago.
DeleteThat is a beautiful way to show your brother that you love him.
DeleteThat you will see him again.
Awe thank you guys! I'm glad you liked it. :)
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ReplyDeleteHow I Love you, Let Me Tell You
ReplyDeleteHow I love you let me tell you.
I love you and all the problems that come along.
Every night my soul does long,
oh how I miss your presence here,
How I love you still, et me tell you.
I love the way you lit up my world,
on that beautiful night when we danced and twirled.
Those days have long gone by, and I am left,
with but a memory of you,
But oh how I love you and who,
you were to me. But the more time
goes by, the more I feel like a mime,
no loner able to spill,
How I love you, still.
I really like that poem. It really puts the emotion into it. It makes me feel happy!
DeleteThat was really great! It was very profound. Good work :)
DeleteMaKenna Moses
DeleteDE, 4th Period
I really appreciate that you give a real perspective on love. When you love someone, you love all of them, that love will always remain, and it will at times be accompanied with sorrow. This poem gives the feeling of all of these things. I especially enjoy how you decided to end this. I found your choice of words and the depiction it gave to be very meaningful. We are at times mimes when it comes to our ability to express our love. I just never saw it that way before! Thank you for sharing!
Wow!
DeleteThat was really deep.
It really shose how people feel sometimes.
Jadis Ewell
ReplyDeleteThe miracles in the world
A very young, beautiful women
who had known
the fireflies, the girl who
had dandelions.
She would be gone from the
warm window.
The jets in
the horizon, he watching
those new stars
the morning would need
a warm smile.
At the bottom of the
stairs waiting for him
would be the incredible pink light of early
morning, so fully aware
of the miracles!
this was all he wanted now.
That was an amazing poem. The meaning inside of it is fery great. Keep up the good work :)
DeleteMaKenna Moses
DeleteDE, 4th Period
I enjoyed how you had everything lead up to your ending. I read the title and was looking for where the inspiration for it came from. I thought it was a strong way to end it! Great message! Well done!
Yes!! This is so good!! I really describes Clarisse and I love it! Amazing!
DeleteVery interesting and cute :)
DeleteCarolyn
DeleteI love your word choice! It painted a beautiful picture in my mind. ;)
Wow! This was amazing and made me (almost) immediately think of Fahrenheit 451! Very well writ and beautifully painted.
DeleteMaKenna Moses
ReplyDeleteDE, 4th Period
How am I a senior? Let me recount my days.
This is getting harder- yeah the struggle is real
I use to not understand- and you may judge
In this state I feel unable to budge
Its like I am being pulled around- dragging my heal
Unable to stand- I am forced to kneel
After each day is over moan and sludge
I won’t do anything with out the sufficient nudge
All emotions are muddled- I don’t know how I feel
Though this is dumb
There will soon be a shift
You are almost done
The best is yet to come
Let that be your lift.
Your journey has just beg
This is really cute and clever! Made me smile. Um the e at the end doesn't rhyme, beg and done. Sorry. :)
DeleteIt was meant to be "begun." It must have cut off. I keep having problems when publishing even though I double check it. Thank you for letting me know! I will see if it will get me fix it.
DeleteThat was really great! I loved the details in it. Good job :)
DeleteReally cute poem :)
DeleteSo creative! I feel this way about summer as well. and maybe I'm interpreting it wrong but this just made me miss summer.
DeleteItalian Sonnet
ReplyDeleteHow do I miss you? Let me count the ways.
I miss you in the bright blue Honda rides.
I miss the Spanish Polka you play when I cry.
I miss the completely you and me days.
I miss you in the things we always play.
I long to see your plays with your bright smile.
I need to listen to CDs with you for a while.
I miss you coming in and asking about my day.
I think of you at the temple since you're gone.
I think of you when I play and sing my songs.
I feel God's love since He knows I miss you.
I wish that I could go on and on and on,
But Sister Jackson said poems can't go long.
Before you come home know I miss you.
I know it's not great, it isn't sneaky like the ones we read in class but it's mine. :)
That was really awesome. I promise that it's a ton better than my Italian Sonnet. Great Job!
DeleteI love this poem! Great Creativity!
DeleteFabulous, simply fabulous!
DeleteMy favorite kind of days
ReplyDeleteAre the stormy rainy ones
Where everything is quiet
And everything is clean
I stand outside with a jacket
While holding a plastic umbrella
I love to feel the rain on my face
Oh, I just love that kind of weather
Rachel Morris DE student period 4
Yeah I totally agree.
DeleteI really love to playin the rain when the rain is warm.
i love the rain it is so fun to play and splash in, unless theres lightning, i like lightning but its not so fun when your outside while its striking all around you. lighning has been so close to my house that it shook and thats happened so many times.
DeleteToday was a rainy day and (I too) loved it!! Cool type of poem. Didn't rhyme but had a good rhythm!
DeleteYus you understand me. I love the rain and the kind of quiet cleanliness it brings with it. I loved the beat of the poem, it flowed so nicely. :)
DeleteWe wait so long yet so short
ReplyDeleteWe sit and wait for time to pass
We listen to the little cry of help of others.
This is so true! Time is so long and short at the same time, we can't waste it witting around and not help those in need.
Delete"Good night." Said the little mouse to the big cat; as he tucked her in. "Good night." Said the tired cat to the tiny mouse as she went to sleep. The little mouse creeped away from the sleeping cat, unaware that the sleeping cat was not sleeping.
ReplyDeleteOOOOoooo!!! The suspense! I loved this! You told a engaging story in three sentences! Nicely done. :)
DeleteChris Cox DE P4.
DeleteGreat use of words, and the end wants me to read more of your poem. Nice Job!
Carolyn C-Italian Sonnet
ReplyDeleteI am not sure if I did this right but here it is. I wrote this poem for my little brother because we are always teasing each other and having fun together.
How do I bother thee, let me count the ways,
I bother thee in jumping on your bed,
I bother thee in embarrassing thee to red,
I bother thee when the sun puts down its rays,
I bother thee by confusing thee to daze,
I bother thee by saying things that "need" to be said,
I bother thee by borrowing a pencil and breaking the lead,
I bother thee by beating thee in a maze,
I will keep trying to be nice,
I wish you light instead of dark,
I am sorry for causing you pain,
If my friendship will not suffice,
Then I will repay with a trip to the ballpark,
From bothering you I will try to abstain.
This is really cute!! I like the ending, Great job!
DeletePeriod 4.
DeleteCarolyn, this is the funniest/cutest poem. I can totally relate because I constantly tease my two little siblings and the ending describes perfectly how I feel!
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ReplyDeletePeriod 4
Deletethe PUBLISHER
When I share my thoughts,
When I produce my words,
Please don't give me rude thoughts,
Please don't give me rude words.
Because these are my heart,
Because they're a part of my soul,
Treat them as your heart,
Treat them like your soul.
(Sorry it's so late. I wasn't home and forgot my bag with my writers notebook so I couldn't find my poem!)
(And when I was looking it over this morning I noticed a mistake)
This is exactly how I feel when I show someone my poems or art or things! Like, I'm not asking for your judgement, I'm giving you my trust, I'm showing you a bit of my heart! I love this! It reminds me of the "tread softly for you tread on my dreams" we read in class.
DeleteOh my goodness I totally relate! Judgement is a fear I have a lot when I let someone read my book or show them a craft I've made.
DeleteMy Italian sonnet about Anthony. (sorry if you don't get it.)
ReplyDeleteHow do I love thee? I will tell you how.
You're bright as moon, stars and shining sun.
You smile, my heart beats like a machine gun.
From the beginning of time and still now,
No thing could I love more than I love thou.
When with you all my worries I do shun;
Take my hand in yours and away we'll run,
The flowers and birds from their sleep we'll rouse.
I love thee with my whole heart, mind and soul,
With the entirety of my mind span;
My life and breath are devoted to thee.
Once ravenous, my empty being is full.
From your ever lasting flower, LuAnne.
This is how I love thee, my Anthony
Oh I didn't put it in stanzas because of the way that would break up the sentences. Just FYI.
DeleteHaha, Ship it! JK :P I loved this poem! It's very sweet. :)
DeleteThe rain falls,
ReplyDeleteThe darkness grows,
The hum of a crimson blade begins,
Blades crash and sparks fly,
Heat is intense with a blinding light,
A body falls limp to the ground,
The victory yells for it has won at least.
This it's really good! It is so simple yet so deep!
DeleteSleepy me can't grammar.
DeleteChris Cox DE P4.
DeleteI like you use of word choice I can hear the intensity and I hear the grinding of metal blades crashing against each other in the story. Nice Job!
How do I sadden thee
ReplyDeleteI sadden thee with my angry words
I sadden thee with my hardened heart
I sadden thee with my tear stained face
I strengthened thee with my trials
I inspire thee with to push on
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ReplyDeleteCaleb Galke
ReplyDeletePeriod 4
DE
Italian Sonnet
They scream and yell “Accept!”
Others lie and prowl,
While they snarl and growl,
What do I do while I feel so inept,
When all the truth is hid and kept,
While they stare and scowl,
Their words smell fake and foul,
Then under the table we are swept,
We will no longer be held silent,
The dam will be broken,
Let the river rage,
We’ll find power in the trident,
All truth will be spoken,
While being written on a new page.
F451 blackout poem
ReplyDeleteFace the past
The death
The cut
New stars come
A warm smile
An incredible light
The world is a miracle
Touch it
Accept it
-Ainsley McFarland, 4th period, DE
This is awesome! I love to see the message other people find on the same page when doing a black out poem. This poem made me feel hopeful and grateful. Even though simple words were used a powerful and deep message was conveyed. Thank you for posting. Keep up the great work, Ainsley!
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ReplyDeleteI can't find a God that's mine,
ReplyDeleteThe hope that held it's breath escapes me.
I can't find a star that shines,
And all that I know has been lost to an ocean dark and deep.
Chris Cox DE P4.
ReplyDeleteMountains
Oh how tall and majestic they stand
They are quite a structure of land
Oh how the wind whistles thru the trees
Its silence gives me shivers up my knees
I climb to the foggy and cold peak
I am tired and very weak.
I gazed at the view below
My heart became quite mellow
The earth the sky the air we breathe
ReplyDeleteI look and see and stand all awed
Then walk in wonder how nothing flawed
Not animals within or ground beneath
Whether a cared for garden or weathered heath
My God my God He is my God!
So I hold strong to the iron rod
He carries me like a fervent sheath
He loves each and every one of us dearly
He shows us his divine mercy
To all with none excluded
Like a shepherd He seeks us sincerely
In a world so full of adversity
I try my best to stand undiluted
The sky is fly so is the book called fly guy. The sky is blue I like to chew food.
ReplyDeleteSo don’t blow the shot of your dreams fight hard for your dreams fight and fight until you can find it in sight.
Flames flicker as they do their dance,
ReplyDeletethe Box-step, some break-down, the waltz, and such.
Always constant in their moving stance,
there to welcome your loving touch.
They're not harmful, they just want water,
To help cool down their fiery step.
If you don't, their rage becomes hotter,
that you would dare have water be kept.
So they raise in magnitude to draw your attention,
and project their bright glare as they continue their course.
And once the buckets bring remuneration,
then they hiss a sweet savory, free from remorse.
There are many layers in this poem. It paints a strong mental picture. Good writing!
DeleteThe rain starts pouring down the window pane
ReplyDeleteEach drop, soothing to the ears
A fast car splashes its neighboring objects in it's lane
Puddles and puddles filled with nature's tears
Cloudy skies with it's thundering clap
It's sounds retreats me to my bed
It's winds howling awaking from it's nap
But comfort, I found, with words that my friends said
Beautiful expression! Just make sure you use the correct form of 'its' next time. You're showing possession, so the contraction form of 'it is' is not what you need.
DeleteBO poetry F451
ReplyDeleteYoung and Beautiful,
like dandelions,
she would lie watching,
dawn in the morning.
waiting carefully in light,
a miracle laid now,
give long thought,
of the look that fell,
upon breaking.
I have a cat named Pinky
ReplyDeleteHe isn't very stinky.
He loves sleeping all day
and at night he likes to play!
I tighten my grip on the rock
ReplyDeleteFingers covered in sweat and chalk
Climbing high toward the sky
I trust my life to a rope hanging at my side
I look out to admire the view
Taking it in before the climb is through
The higher I climb the more peaceful I feel
When I'm up on the rock my worries aren't real
Ariel Bilyeu (D.E.)